tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2138112985385384206.post1097539210321472202..comments2022-10-22T04:29:58.008-05:00Comments on Kaitlyn Mclarty's EDM 310 Blog: Blog Post #13Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00313955403895851264noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2138112985385384206.post-79443042454209185492014-11-23T18:46:51.245-06:002014-11-23T18:46:51.245-06:00Kaitlyn Mclarty,
I loved your videos! You found s...Kaitlyn Mclarty,<br /><br />I loved your videos! You found some really good material! I also love your pictures! You did an <b><i>amazing job</i></b> on those! It really is a shame that art and music are the first things that go. I definitely think that art can help keep the children engaged and help them learn the information.<br /><br />There are a few suggestions that I have for this post. The main thing you need to do is proofread your posts. I believe that if you spend <b><i>just a little</i></b> more time on proofreading, the quality of your post would increase <i>dramatically</i>. Here are just a <i>few</i> examples:<br /> - "...around the Country." Country does not need to be capitalized here.<br /> - "Do you think art is important in a students life and their education." This is a question and needs a question mark.<br /> - "After watching these videos and really understanding how much art is not in the classroom anymore made me to..." If you start with after, you need a comma at the end of the thought. I believe the comma needs to be after anymore. With that being said, you would need to add a subject before made. "It" seems like a good one for that spot. (There are several like this. If you start with "when, "because," "if," and other similar words, you need two "thoughts" or sentences within the one sentence.)<br /><br />Overall, you did a good job on your post! Have fun with the last couple weeks in EDM310!<br /><a href="http://colejenniferedm310.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Jennifer Cole</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03251255601619452721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2138112985385384206.post-49308476612514592014-11-23T14:53:11.790-06:002014-11-23T14:53:11.790-06:00It really is a shame that many schools in this cou...It really is a shame that many schools in this country do not see the importance of art and music. Good job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09090374394712895066noreply@blogger.com